I like it the way it is... the last line is the most powerful... the senses that are yours are mine now... although the first is also very powerful ... this poem could be a bit scary lol but if I was the 'you' in the poem and you were the 'me' then I wouldn't mind at all :)
there's something really weird about this poem,
ReplyDeleteI feel like I should read it backwards, like read the last line first.
I don't know what it is, but I really like it.
I like it the way it is... the last line is the most powerful... the senses that are yours are mine now... although the first is also very powerful ... this poem could be a bit scary lol but if I was the 'you' in the poem and you were the 'me' then I wouldn't mind at all :)
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